Topic for the response: The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
On December 31st, 1999, at the last day of 20th
century, hope and expectation were prevalent in society with fear and worries
facing the new millennium. Embracing those emotions, it has been 13 years since
21st century was born. Several changes are made until now, and they
are indicating other new changes in the future as well. I’ve selected few
changes which are expected to be brought by brand new century.
Netscape went public on September 8th, 1995 at the
cost of 28$. It started the internet, dotcom market boom. In 21st
century, with the invention of smart phone, the world consists of more webs of
internet and cell phones, and the development of network shifted the agent of
several activities from group to individuals. Now we can download open-source
software, movies, and songs with one click at home. For example, using a
program ‘utorrent’, each individuals can upload and download files. We can
update our status on our personal blogs or social media. Free educational
lectures are offered at university website, making our visit to school unnecessary.
In the past, all sort of things used to be held in groups such as the education
in classroom, information shared in library. However, due to the development of
network in 21st century, activities are becoming
individual-oriented.
Expected changes also include the development of renewable
energy. The renewable energy is an energy which comes from the resources which
are continuously replenished. They include wind, solar, bio-fuel and geothermal
energy. Their further developments in 21st century are self-evident
since the men are feeling the need of renewable energy by their skin. The
global warming is expedited in 21st century, causing several
phenomena such as stronger hurricanes, sea level rising, and polarization of
seasons. Oil, natural gas and coal are running out within a century at most,
and pollution is getting worse in every aspect. People started to focus on
renewable energy, and continuing research and development. For example, methane hydrate and shale gas are newly found energy which are being investigated
currently. Since human are keep feeling the need of renewable energy, and
conducting research and development, renewable energy are expected to be the
main source of energy.
Barely a decade has passed since 21st century began,
and it might be too early to suggest changes expected in new century. However,
individualization and renewable energy as main energy source are quite feasible
changes. By reflecting 20th century, I hope we earn more positive
changes than negative ones, and better result at the end of 21st century.
Seems like I'm the first uploader!
답글삭제This essay is basically well-organized, considering that the points you've made are rephrased at the conclusion part. It might've been better if you implicitly described it at the intro, but still, you gave a grasp of your essay in overall. Plus, that you are referring to interesting examples (like Netscape), and getting to your argument chronologically, I wasn't bored at all.
To sum up, it was a good essay! I appreciate your effort into it.
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Hi YeSeul!!!!
답글삭제I'd say that your essay is well-written and very informative!! I'm very impressed :) Especially, specific examples helped me understanding your essay.
But I want to ask you why you chose to write about the development of network. I admit that it's one of the changes that will take place in the new century, but I don't see a clear reason of choosing this topic. Activities becoming individual-oriented might need a stronger support. It's just a suggestion and I really enjoyed reading your essay!
Hey ye seul~~ :D
답글삭제First of all, good style, few grammatical errors, and casual ending-which I liked the most. And I feel like you have elaborated your each point well with specific examples. Good! Especially, your point about social networking was good. Introducing new concepts were quite impressive as well. Overall, one of the best essays I have read so far! gooood :D